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Unnecessary detail 不必要的细节
所有论述都应该为主旨服务,要用最精炼的话准确表达观点
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Vague wording 用词含义不明确
Eg. First, treating pets as family members may lead to good return. (good return 意义不明确)
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The use of absolutes instead of the language of possibility 使用过于绝对的词汇
Eg. will, always, undeniably, etc.
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Meaningless statements 无意义的陈述
Eg. After having learnt Unit 3, I learn a lot of things.
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Dangling modifiers 无依着修饰语
Eg. Rather than trapping in humdrum jobs every day or doing homework with fatigue and boredom, distinct delights can be brought from keeping different animals. (前面修饰语的主体与主句主语不匹配)
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Over-generalizing 过于笼统地概括
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Over-statements 言过其实 (带着偏见写文章)
Eg. As a derogatory term appeared in many historical documents, "colonialism" is often regarded as a word linked with "settlement" or "invasion", which are not very friendly to the native people.
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Excessive wordiness 过度冗长
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Making the impersonal personal/animated 将非人的东西主动化
Eg. ...Because the intentions of both terms are to gain wealth and to build political recognition and reputation globally. (terms没有intentions)
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Argumentation in the introduction 开头段的论证(开头段不应有过多的背景知识和任何论述)
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Overuse of there is / are 滥用“there is / are"
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Unnecessary/faulty definitions/explanations 不必要或错误的定义和解释
Eg. ..., which means...(除非有专有名词或某词汇的不寻常用法)
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Failure to make parallel 并列短语或句子使用错误
Eg. Since imperial governments and their merchants in 19th century were constantly seeking ways to maximize profits, cheap labors, abundant natural resources, and broad market became very critical to achieve this goal.
(可以说like..., like..., and like...)
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Faulty Transitioning 错误的过渡
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Stating the obvious 陈述很明显的事实